“Grabs your attention!”

—naricorn rated: 3.0

“A Little Convoluted, but Has Lots of Promise!”

—haeun_logos rated: 2.5

“Interesting premise!”

—LoseThatLeftSock rated: 3.5

“Clear prose and engrossing concept!”

—naricorn rated: 4.5

“Strong storytelling”

—baileym rated: 4.5

“Please give me more I beg you”

—procrastinator_extraordinaire rated: 5.0

“Quaint little piece”

—naricorn rated: 3.5

“Needs paragraph separations”

—KatieWenn rated: 3.0

“Tender and Gently Heartbreaking”

—haeun_logos rated: 4.0

“Sudden shift”

—naricorn rated: 3.0

“great tension”

—van rated: 3.5

“Intro, voice and dialogue”

—slorence rated: 3.5

“Why is this story being told, and why is it being told now?”

—naricorn rated: 3.5

“An excellent portrayal of hysteria and desperation”

—van rated: 4.0

“A harrowing encounter between fear, guilt, and certain death.”

—Hyba rated: 4.5

“Haunting--this piece is a gem.”

—naricorn rated: 5.0

“Interesting in some parts”

—whatdoyouneed rated: 3.0

“Villainous main character? Interesting power? I'm in (but please work on the pacing).”

—nenatia rated: 3.0

“Interesting but check grammar!”

—metafrick rated: 3.0

“Unexpected, but Great!”

—haeun_logos rated: 4.0

“Well written, but not a story.”

—cereed27 rated: 1.5

“Could use more specifics and make it clearer what the story's about in the beginning.”

—oc rated: 3.5