“A sensual, enchanting piece!”

—Hyba rated: 5.0

“otherworldly and ethereal”

—van rated: 4.0

“Beautiful descriptions but don't go overboard!”

—naricorn rated: 4.0

“Elegant images.”

—naricorn rated: 4.0

“Great flow”

—quinnm93 rated: 4.5

“Want to know about the characters”

—van rated: 4.0

“Interesting world!”

—sam rated: 4.0

“Engaging voice”

—van rated: 4.0

“Good but needs some work”

—Rose_Platter rated: 3.0

“Interesting premise but a tad wordy”

—quinnm93 rated: 3.5

“Worthy of Revisions”

—Flounce rated: 2.5

“Favorite”

—dayahorne rated: 3.5

“Good Flow and Descriptions!”

—haeun_logos rated: 3.0

“Interesting character dynamics”

—van rated: 3.0

“A Lot of Potential - Just Insufficiently Fleshed Out”

—haeun_logos rated: 3.0

“Overall good, missing a lot tho”

—thelittlewolf45 rated: 3.0

“Very interesting!”

—scbonifaz rated: 3.5

“I need to understand these characters better.”

—naricorn rated: 3.5

“Show Don't Tell, Kill Your Darlings, & Deepen Those Characters”

—[email protected] rated: 2.0

“Absurd. What an imagination!”

—naricorn rated: 4.0

“Fewer characters please, but nice writing”

—michaelbotur rated: 3.0

“I have a soft spot for anything that involves fairies and selfish protagonists”

—van rated: 3.5

“Strong choreography of action but needs more momentum”

—naricorn rated: 3.5

“Great start!”

—beco99 rated: 4.0

“Decent start but needs a bit more...”

—darlingnell rated: 2.5

“Want more Darren”

—naricorn rated: 2.5

“Overall Thoughts”

—awkwardlyfloatingpan rated: 4.0

“great!”

—manaaar. rated: 4.0

“More?”

—dvillene rated: 3.0

“Concept is there, needs a few read-throughs”

—dvillene rated: 2.5

“Loved the Descriptions!”

—Team_Vega rated: 3.5