“Grabs your attention!”

—naricorn rated: 3.0

“A Little Convoluted, but Has Lots of Promise!”

—haeun_logos rated: 2.5

“Interesting premise!”

—LoseThatLeftSock rated: 3.5

“Very interesting!”

—scbonifaz rated: 3.5

“I need to understand these characters better.”

—naricorn rated: 3.5

“I'm interested, but some repetition, and I need to understand the protagonist better.”

—naricorn rated: 3.5

“so many possibilities”

—van rated: 3.0

“Interesting concept, needs a little work”

—beco99 rated: 3.0

“Balanced world-building but diction is irregular.”

—van rated: 2.5

“there are some lines in this piece that are definitely going to stick with me”

—nenatia rated: 4.0

“A fast-paced, compelling sci-fi piece!”

—Hyba rated: 4.5

“As usual, intriguing new chapter.”

—naricorn rated: 4.0

“Interesting in some parts”

—whatdoyouneed rated: 3.0

“Villainous main character? Interesting power? I'm in (but please work on the pacing).”

—nenatia rated: 3.0

“PLEASE don't leave it here.”

—oc rated: 5.0

“Vivid descriptions and shocking horror!”

—beco99 rated: 4.5

“Interesting idea”

—oddone rated: 3.0

“My favorite story of yours so far”

—naricorn rated: 4.0

“intriguing start to an intriguing world”

—nenatia rated: 4.0

“A strong beginning”

—dvillene rated: 4.5

“Interesting start!”

—beco99 rated: 3.5

“Interesting start but be more concise!”

—naricorn rated: 3.0

“I'm interested in what this is leading up to”

—van rated: 3.5

“Again, needs concision and better grounding”

—naricorn rated: 2.5

“what's going on”

—van rated: 2.5

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“Could use more specifics and make it clearer what the story's about in the beginning.”

—oc rated: 3.5

“Work on mechanics!”

—naricorn rated: 3.0

“your descriptions made me feel like I was in the forest with the beast”

—van rated: 3.0

“Content is good! Format is odd.”

—delpieman rated: 3.0

“Nice start!”

—beco99 rated: 3.0

“Cool”

—Sunchaser rated: 4.0

“Sneak peek that doesn't give away too much”

—naricorn rated: 3.0