“Unsure at first but has potential”

—naricorn rated: 2.5

“Very interesting!”

—scbonifaz rated: 3.5

“I need to understand these characters better.”

—naricorn rated: 3.5

“I'm interested, but some repetition, and I need to understand the protagonist better.”

—naricorn rated: 3.5

“so many possibilities”

—van rated: 3.0

“Interesting concept, needs a little work”

—beco99 rated: 3.0

“Balanced world-building but diction is irregular.”

—van rated: 2.5

“Cool”

—Sunchaser rated: 4.0

“Sneak peek that doesn't give away too much”

—naricorn rated: 3.0

“Nice start!”

—beco99 rated: 3.0

“Interesting start!”

—beco99 rated: 3.5

“Interesting start but be more concise!”

—naricorn rated: 3.0

“I'm interested in what this is leading up to”

—van rated: 3.5

“the plot has taken an interesting turn”

—nenatia rated: 4.0

“Imaginative potential but also could be clearer”

—naricorn rated: 3.5

“Cool concept but would like more direction”

—naricorn rated: 3.5

“beautiful descriptions that need a point”

—van rated: 3.0

“Keep it Coming”

—cereed27 rated: 4.0

“Did NOT see that coming.”

—naricorn rated: 4.0

“Seriously, how do you come up with cliffhangers like this?”

—nenatia rated: 3.5

“Work on mechanics!”

—naricorn rated: 3.0

“your descriptions made me feel like I was in the forest with the beast”

—van rated: 3.0

“Content is good! Format is odd.”

—delpieman rated: 3.0