“Great start -- let's just tighten the narrative”

—AmandaRae1200 rated: 3.0

“I like this idea”

—oddone rated: 3.5

“Interesting in parts, but not sure where the story is going”

—whatdoyouneed rated: 3.0

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—liorzoë rated: 5.0