“Good story”

—oddone rated: 4.0

“More background development.”

—naricorn rated: 4.0

“wow great stuff”

—Roger3030 rated: 4.0

“Loved the Descriptions!”

—Team_Vega rated: 3.5

“More hints about your extremely interesting character.”

—brouhaha rated: 3.5

“Great begining!”

—SarahViecelli rated: 3.5

“Interesting character and an interesting beginning!”

—beco99 rated: 3.5

“Squirmy, Dreamy, and Full of Plot”

—dvillene rated: 4.0

“Slight inconsistencies to work on”

—naricorn rated: 4.0

“A sensual, enchanting piece!”

—Hyba rated: 5.0

“otherworldly and ethereal”

—van rated: 4.0

“Beautiful descriptions but don't go overboard!”

—naricorn rated: 4.0

“Great attempt, but short-sighted, with huge technical problems.”

—K-Anu-Grymm rated: 2.0

“The emotional core is there, but the story needs balance.”

—naricorn rated: 4.0

“An emotionally-charged story with great potential!”

—Hyba rated: 3.5