“Work on mechanics!”

—naricorn rated: 3.0

“your descriptions made me feel like I was in the forest with the beast”

—van rated: 3.0

“Content is good! Format is odd.”

—delpieman rated: 3.0

“Interesting start!”

—beco99 rated: 3.5

“Interesting start but be more concise!”

—naricorn rated: 3.0

“I'm interested in what this is leading up to”

—van rated: 3.5

“Interesting stream of thought but lacks clarity”

—beco99 rated: 2.5

“Work on vagueness”

—naricorn rated: 2.0

“Feels disconnected from the first chapter”

—naricorn rated: 1.5

“interesting idea, reconsider execution”

—van rated: 1.5

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—crishacker99gmailcom rated: 2.5

“Cool concept but would like more direction”

—naricorn rated: 3.5

“beautiful descriptions that need a point”

—van rated: 3.0

“Keep it Coming”

—cereed27 rated: 4.0

“Experimental and curious but needs more clarity!”

—naricorn rated: 2.0

“Interesting and emotional but I would like to see more personality”

—Daniel rated: 3.0